岡　達郎 (jesse-oka) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
I got 2 cabinets sold to me for 750 pounds including the postage, and I did pay.
I am already done with the payment, so can you ship them immediately?

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I have purchased and paid for two cabinets from you for 750 pounds inclusive of shipping charges.
Could you please ship my order immediately since I have already made the payment?

元の翻訳
Regarding to the schedule of the Meeting with the ABC Company, how’s your convenience?

So far, I can arrange my time slot as following.
Sep. 18(Thu): 15:00-16:00
Sep. 19(Fri): 15:00-17:00

The place for the meeting will be the office of the ABC Company.
Its address is below.

I am waiting your feedback.

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Regarding the schedule for the Meeting with the ABC Company, what time is convenient?

So far, I can arrange my time slots as follows.
Sep. 18 (Thu): 15:00-16:00
Sep. 19 (Fri): 15:00-17:00

The place for the meeting will be at the office of the ABC Company.
The address is below.

I await your feedback.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply.
How was the event in Amsterdam?
Since I suddenly asked you to adjust the meeting schedule, I think it can’t be helped that you say impossible.
I’ll make a contact if a telephone meeting is necessary.

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Thank you for your reply.
How was the event in Amsterdam?
Since I suddenly asked you to adjust the meeting schedule, I think it can’t be helped that you say impossible.
[As I was who made sudden changes to the schedule, I understand that you are not able to attend.]↵
I’ll make a contact if a telephone meeting is necessary.

元の翻訳
Information of shipment:
We use SAL post as “Standard” delivery, and in this case, it takes 3-4 weeks from Japan to your country. “Expedited” uses EMS(Express Mail Service), and it takes 7-10 days to your country.
Note: We recommend “Expedited” by EMS(Express Mail Service). Because EMS has tracking numbers, and you can check online where currently your luggage is.

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Shipment information:
We use SAL as “Standard” delivery, and in this case, it takes 3-4 weeks from Japan to your country. “Expedited” uses EMS (Express Mail Service), and it takes 7-10 days to your country.
Note: We recommend “Expedited” by EMS (Express Mail Service), because EMS has tracking numbers, and you can check online where currently your package is.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your purchase.
Did you get satisfied with the goods you purchased?
If so, please give us a feedback as 5-starred.

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Thank you for your purchase.
Are you satisfied with your purchase?
If so, please rate us with 5 stars.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your purchase.
Did you get satisfied with the goods you purchased?
If so, please give us a feedback as 5-starred.

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Thank you for your purchase.
Are you satisfied with the item you purchased?
If so, please give us a rating of 5 stars.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your order.
I sent you EMS’s shipping mail last night by mistake.
I am sorry, but please discard the email saying the shipment is done last night.

I am sorry to bother you.

Best regards,

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Thank you for your order.
I sent you EMS’s shipping mail last night by mistake.
I am sorry, but please discard the email I sent you yesterday saying the shipment is done.

I am sorry to have bothered you.

Best regards,

元の翻訳
If my English has odd expressions, or you know any better expressions, please tell me.
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Basically, a gratitude happened just before is “ありがとうございます” (Arigatougozaimasu), if it’s past, it becomes “～ました” (～mashita).

As a proper use, “ありがとうございました” is used just before a conversation with a partner ends.
For instance, at a convenience store, when you leave from a register, a store staff says that, or just before finishing conversation on the phone.

But Japanese are not such strict to distinguish those. There’ll be many cases that meaning is still correct, even if you switch those.↵

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If my English is odd, or you know a better way of saying it, please tell me.
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Basically, expressing gratitude for something someone did on that moment, almost instantaneously, is “ありがとうございます” (Arigatougozaimasu), If some time has passed, it becomes “～ました” (～mashita).

As a rule of thumb, “ありがとうございました” is usually used at the end of a conversation.
For instance, at a convenience store, when you're about to walk away from the cashier, the staff would probably say that, or when finishing conversation on the phone.

But Japanese themselves do not strictly observe the above rules. There’ll be many cases where it doesn't matter which one you use.

元の翻訳
Could you tell me the specification of Twitter API that comes with Twitter PVA?
I wish the following Twitter API.
1) A proper URL is already entered in Callback URL.
2) Permission is set to Read, Write access.
3) Access token is already made.

When will Twitter PVA arrive?
I want 300 of Twitter PVA’s.
The earlier the better.
Would you let me know when those arrives?

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Could you tell me the specification of Twitter API that comes with Twitter PVA?
I wish to purchase the following Twitter API.
1) An appropriate URL is already entered in Callback URL.
2) Permission is set to Read, Write access.
3) Access token is already made.

When will Twitter PVA arrive?
I want 300 pcs of Twitter PVA.
The sooner the better.
Please let me know when they arrive.

元の翻訳
I checked it.
The setting of control panel has been set to ABC.
But I guess the actual screen of the Homepage is DEF.
Since if I toss you questions any further, it’ll bother you, so I stop it.

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I checked it.
The setting of control panel has been set to ABC.
But I guess the actual screen of the homepage is DEF.
If I toss you questions any further, it’ll bother you, so I stop it.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply.
And Yes, please change the demand to 0, and cancel my account.

Best regards,

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Thank you for your reply.
And then, please change the request amount to zero, and cancel my account.

Best regards,

元の翻訳
I am sorry that my translation work got delayed today.
In recent my translation work, sometimes some sentences which would be concluded as one sentence by connecting originally, are divided into several sentences.
Should I translate them separately?

Until now, I have been translating sentences as they are being separated, but this makes translation odd as a sentence by all means.

If possible, I’d like to deliver right sentences, connecting those into one sentence each, how does this sound to you?


I’ll appreciate your instruction.
Best regards!

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I am sorry that my translation work got delayed today.
In my recent translation works, sometimes some sentences which would be concluded as one sentence by connecting originally, are divided into several sentences.
Should I translate them separately?

Until now, I have been translating sentences as they are being separated, but this makes translation odd as a sentence by all means.

If possible, I’d like to deliver right sentences, connecting those into one sentence each, how does this sound to you?


I’ll appreciate your instruction.
Best regards!

元の翻訳
Hello,

We are very sorry that we bothered you with our mistake this time.
Regarding to the product, we’ll purchase one from Amazon US, and will directly send you it.
Its delivery schedule is "Wednesday, September 10, 2014-Saturday, September 13, 2014".
As soon as Amazon ships the item, we’ll let you know its tracking number.
We are much obliged, we are very sorry about this again.
Best regards,

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Hello,

We are very sorry for the inconvenience caused by our error.
We'll purchase the product from Amazon US, which will directly send it to you.
It's scheduled to be delivered between "Wednesday, September 10, 2014-Saturday, September 13, 2014."
As soon as Amazon ships the item, we'll let you know its tracking number.
We are much obliged. We are very sorry about this again.
Best regards,

元の翻訳
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I can’t log-in to my account despite I am typing the right ID and password.
Could you tell me why?

Thanks and regards,

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I can’t log in to my account even though I am typing the right ID and password.
Could you tell me why?

Thanks and regards,

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message.
Regarding to the product, we have shipped, however it exceeded the size which can be sent to France, and it got returned to me in the middle of delivery.

We are very sorry but this time we will cancel your order and repay.

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Thank you for your message.
We have shipped the product to you, however it exceeded the maximum allowable size which can be sent to France, and it got returned to me in the middle of delivery.

We are very sorry but this time we will cancel your order and will issue you a full refund.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message.
Regarding to the product, we have shipped, however it exceeded the size which can be sent to France, and it got returned to me in the middle of delivery.

We are very sorry but this time we will cancel your order and repay.

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Thank you for your message.
Regarding the product, we have shipped it, however it exceeded the size which can be sent to France, and it got returned to me in the middle of delivery.

We are very sorry but this time we will cancel your order and issue you a refund.

元の翻訳
Is it difficult to use only the API of YouTube only when executing searches in the search window? (not including Last.fm API)
When interposing an API of Last.fm, I cannot play the latest movies.
I guess demands that they want to play the latest tunes, so I will be glad if you consider about it.

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Is it difficult to use only the YouTube API only when executing searches in the search window? (not via Last.fm API)
When interposing the Last.fm API, I cannot play the latest videos.
I guess demands that to play the latest tunes would be high, so I will be glad if you consider about it.

元の翻訳

Thank you very much for information of the product etc.
But currently for me, additional $50 is a huge expenditure.
I’d like to restrain myself from buying the goods you suggested at great pains.

I am going to ship and return the commodity which came to me and is in a wrong size,↵
so could you repay for the commodity price?

While a dealing was not consisted, I’d like to say thank you for your interaction with a great faith.

Is any shipping method ok for you when returning?
Please understand that I postpone the payment until the returned goods arrive.

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Thank you very much for information of the product etc.
But currently for me, an additional $50 is a huge expenditure.
I appreciate the suggestion but I'd like to restrain myself from buying the goods.

I am going to ship and return the item that I received in a wrong size, so could you please give me a refund?

I'd like to thank you for your honest and thorough service, even if the transaction did not work out.

Is any shipping method ok for you when returning the item?
Please understand that I will postpone the payment until the returned goods arrive.

元の翻訳
Being much obliged.

We are sorry that there is a problem in photograph.
Although we can interact if you return goods after 14th, sorry for trouble you, but it would be appreciated if you can return as soon as possible.

After the product reached us, we will refund you via PayPal.

We are sorry for troubling you.

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Being much obliged.

We are sorry that there is a problem in photograph.
Although we can interact if you return goods after 14th, sorry for trouble you, but it would be appreciated if you can return as soon as possible.

After the product reaches us, we will refund you via PayPal.

We are sorry for troubling you.

元の翻訳
This user has also before stolen another script and it became a problem.
Of course the exhibit was canceled.

Icons or photos have copyrights. This is what even a child know.
Plus not only icons or photos, you are plagiarizing. You are a thief.

But before that, as long as seeing your preview, there a bunch of bugs.
They are not one or two bugs, and I think this author’s skill is not enough to fix those.

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This user has also stolen another script before and it became a problem.
Of course the exhibit was canceled.

Icons or photos have copyrights. Even a child knows better than this.
Plus not only icons or photos, you are plagiarizing other stuff. You are a thief.

But before that, as far as seeing your preview, there are a bunch of bugs.
They are not one or two bugs, and I think with this skillset this author cannot handle to fix those.

元の翻訳
If I make an order today, when will it be delivered?
I want the goods to reach me within like a week, could you ship earlier?
I can pay additional fee.

Can it possibly be 4-7 days with EMS?

Best regards,

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If I placed an order today, when will it be delivered?
I want the goods to be delivered to me within a week or so. Do you have express shipping available?
I can pay additional fee.

With EMS, would it be able to deliver the item in 4-7 days?

Best regards,

元の翻訳
If I make an order today, when will it be delivered?
I want the goods to reach me within like a week, could you ship earlier?
I can pay additional fee.

Can it possibly be 4-7 days with EMS?

Best regards,

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If I place an order today, when will it be delivered?
I want the goods to reach me in a week or so [comma splice], could you ship earlier [than?]?
I can pay [article?] additional fee.

Can it possibly be 4-7 days with EMS?

Best regards,