Hiroshi (hiro_ure_87) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
2009年
丸一年、独学でタロットを学んだ（タロット占い師になろうと考えたが、ならなかった）。
A380エアバスで、シンガポールから、パリ、フランスへ、初めて渡った。
フランスに３カ月滞在した。

2010年
フランスに居を構えながら、半年かけて北アフリカ、西アフリカを中心に旅行した（チュニジア、モロッコ、西サハラ、モーリタニア、マリ、ブルキナ・ファソなど）。
ブルキナ・ファソの首都のワガドゥーグーに短いあいだだが、住んだ。
ホームシックにかかり、ワガドゥーグーから、パリ経由で香港に戻った。
香港に戻ったあと、再会したフランス人の友人から、メスの猫を引き取った。

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2009年
丸一年、独学でタロットを学ぶ（タロット占い師になろうと考えたが断念）。
A380エアバスでシンガポールからフランスはパリへ初の渡航。
フランスに３カ月の短期滞在。

2010年
フランスを離れ半年間北アフリカ、西アフリカを精力的に旅行（チュニジア、モロッコ、西サハラ、モーリタニア、マリ、ブルキナ・ファソ）。
ブルキナ・ファソの首都ワガドゥーグーに短期滞在。
ホームシックになり、ワガドゥーグーからパリ経由で香港に帰還。
香港に帰還後、再会したフランス人の友人からメス猫を引き取る。

元の翻訳

コットンハンモック

通気の良いコットン100パーセント製、このブラジル風ハンモックの綿密な織り目によって、優れた快適性を提供します。カラフルなシマ模様のコットンの生地が寄り添うような気持ちにさせ、どこか遠くへ行ってしまいそうな感覚にを呼び起こします。

このハンモックは植物系染料コットンで、ご使用されない際、または悪天候の際には屋内にお取り込みいただくと、何年も長持ちします。お洗濯の際は、冷水にて手洗い（漬け置き厳禁）、非漂白洗剤をご使用ください。

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コットンハンモック

通気の良いコットン100パーセント製、このブラジル風ハンモックの綿密な織り目によって、優れた快適性を提供します。カラフルなシマ模様のコットンの生地に心地よく横たわると、どこか遠くへ行ってしまいそうな感覚にを呼び起こします。

このハンモックは植物系染料コットンで、ご使用されない際、または悪天候の際には屋内にお取り込みいただくと、何年も長持ちします。お洗濯の際は、冷水にて手洗い（漬け置き厳禁）、非漂白洗剤をご使用ください。

元の翻訳
■Note;
* " Commemorative Photo Event" can finish even in the case that some customers are still standing in the line.
* Please refrain from making inquiries to the venue, which could cause cancellation of the live event.
* It is strictly prohibited to try to secure some spaces by placing your lugguages or sit-in. We would like you to understand in advance that our staffs may ask you t o relocate.
*Please note that the admission tickets for the comemorative photo event can not be reissued for any reasons including loss and theft.

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■Note;
* " Commemorative Photo Event" can finish even in the case that some customers are still standing in the line.
* Please refrain from making inquiries to the venue, which could cause cancellation of the live event.
* It is strictly prohibited to secure some spaces by placing your luggage or sitting in. Our staffs may ask you to move to a different location.
*Please note that the admission tickets for the comemorative photo event can not be reissued for any reasons including loss and theft.

元の翻訳
ＩＧ7901
Thank you for contacting.
Circumstances has been investigated.
It seems the item is stuck at the outward office of exchange of Japan.
Yet the reason is about to be confirmed, it seems the knife is judged as a dangerous object.
We are now negotiating.
If it turns out difficult to ship the item we will repay you all the money,Please don't worry.
We will do our best.
Have a good day.

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ＩＧ7901
Thank you for contacting.
We investigated the circumstances.
It seems the item is currently stuck at an international exchange office in Japan.
Yet the reason is about to be confirmed, it seems the knife is judged as a dangerous object.
We are now negotiating.
If it turns out to be difficult to ship the item, we will repay you all the money, so please don't worry.
We will do our best.
Have a good day.

元の翻訳
Thank you very much for your message.
With regards to the product delivery period, it will take a substantial amount of time to make an overseas delivery.
Please kindly understand this.

If you won't be able to accept that, then we can also accept a cancellation.
Thank you.


Thank you very much for your message.

We have also confirmed that there were no alarm-like function.

We would appreciate it if you would consider the purchase.

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Thank you very much for your message.
With regards to the product delivery period, it will take a substantial amount of time to make an overseas delivery.
Thank you for your understanding.

If you won't be able to accept this, we can also accept a cancellation.
Thank you.


Thank you very much for your message.

We have also confirmed that there were no alarm-like function.

We would appreciate it if you would consider the purchase.

元の翻訳

※ Formats:
Language: Korean
Dubbed: Japanese
Subtitles and Captions: Japanese
Aspect Ratio: 16:9

※ “Yaoh〜Ai To Yokubou No Hate〜Complete DVD box(limited edition featuring Dohun)” is an exclusive merchandise of Bigeast.
※ Admission tickets for “Yaoh〜Ai To Yokubou No Hate〜Premium Event 2014” is offered as a special bonus only to the purchaser of “Yaoh〜Ai To Yokubou No Hate〜Complete DVD box(limited edition featuring Dohun)”.

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A Press Conference by South Korean Creators
A Special Program for a Broadcast in South Korea↵
etc.↵
↵
※ Formats:
Language: Korean, Japanese
Dubbed: Japanese
Subtitles and Captions: Japanese
Aspect Ratio: 16:9

※ “Yaoh〜Ai To Yokubou No Hate〜Complete DVD box(limited edition featuring Dohun)” is an exclusive merchandise of Bigeast.
※ Admission tickets for “Yaoh〜Ai To Yokubou No Hate〜Premium Event 2014” is offered as a special bonus only to the purchaser of “Yaoh〜Ai To Yokubou No Hate〜Complete DVD box(limited edition featuring Dohun)”.

元の翻訳
* The contents of the special movie included in the normal version DVD and the Complete DVD Box are the same.
* The product design, specifications and special contents are subject to change.
* For more details, please take a look at the ''Complete DVD-BOX with Premium Event Entry Ticket sales site''.
● Bigeast official shop (Compatible with PC / Mobile)
http://shop.mu-mo.net/st/fc/BGFC.html
©SBS

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* The contents of the special movie included in the normal version DVD and the Complete DVD Box are the same.
* The product design, specifications and special contents are subject to change.
* For more details, please take a look at the ''Complete DVD-BOX with Premium Event Entry Ticket Sales Site''.
Bigeast official shop (Compatible with PC / Mobile)
http://shop.mu-mo.net/st/fc/BGFC.html
©SBS

元の翻訳
Would you largely make it inexpensive, if I purchase several?

Is there have any Japanese company making a deal elsewhere?

I want to purchase with a low price of Japan.


In the one that import it from the United States and sell,↵
The sales price of the low is 13,000 yen in Japan (approximately $ 125).

We can not win at price competition by the price that you showed us.

I am terribly sorry only for this demand,
We will purchase it in large quantities.(Or we will purchase other model) that being the case,
can I have your consideration?

↵
It continues regularly and will purchase it in future.

We ask for your consideration on this matter.↵

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Would you give me a big discount for purchasing several items?

Is there any Japanese company making a deal elsewhere?

I would like to purchase it with the lowest price in Japan.


The one person importing the product from the United States sells it with the lowest price of 13,000 yen ((approximately $125) in Japan.

We can not win the price competition by the price that you showed us.

I am sorry for this demand,
But we are planning to purchase it in large quantities (or we may purchase other model as well).
Would you please reestimate the price?

I will keep placing an order.

Thank you for your consideration on this matter.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message.
This item is a genuine Sony product.
The settings can be changed to English.
I recommend a voltage adapter be purchased for this item.

Thank you for your message.
I mus apologize.
I will get back to you with the details of this item at a later date.
Thank you very much.

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Thank you for your message.
This item is an official Sony product.
You can change the language to English.
I would recommend you to purchase a voltage adapter for appropriate voltage for this product.

Thank you for your message.
I am sorry.
I will send you an email about this product
Thank you very much for your understanding.

元の翻訳
I am not selling cameras with the intent to deceive you.
This is not in the least the kind of business I want to do internationally.
I would like to apologize for the fact that the description was insufficient, and that as a result of this vagueness you had a negative experience.

I am also very saddened by this.
Please return the camera.
I would like to pay you back the money for the camera.
Once again my sincere apologies.

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I am not selling cameras with the intent to deceive you.
This is not in the least the kind of business I want to do internationally.
I would like to apologize for the fact that the description was insufficient, and that as a result of this vagueness you had a negative experience.

I deeply regret that this happened.
Please return the camera.
I would like to pay you back the money for the camera.
Once again my sincere apologies.

元の翻訳
Restoration of rights

I'd like to make sales at B once again.
I'd resubmit my sales plan.
Would you please consider my offer?
I won't let you down ever so please give me one more chance.
I'll take care of any matters to death to be the best sales person from now on.

points of improvement
(improvement of performance decline)

*Rate of ineffective Orders
1) inventory control thoroughly
We will increase the number of people for inventory control from one to three to prevent from the situations that we can not ship out due to stock out.
We will perform inventory adjustment every day.

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Restoration of Rights

I'd like to have a permission to make a sale at B once again.
I'd resubmit my sales plan.
Would you please consider my offer?
I won't let you down ever so please give me one more chance.
I'll take care of any matters to death to be the best sales person from now on.

Points of Improvement
(Improving performance decline)

*Rate of Ineffective Orders
1) Thorough Inventory Control
We will increase the number of people for inventory control from one to three to prevent from a situation where we can not ship out due to stock out.
We will perform inventory adjustment every day.

元の翻訳
Let me know if you know the following.

Where do you import ○○? From someone around Lufthansa or China?

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Let me know if you know anything about this:

Do you import ○○ from someone around Lufthansa? Or from China?

元の翻訳
I will be moving to SF within 17th, and will be heading for Atlanta via LA in the morning of 18th. From Atlanta (arriving at 13:35), I will be driving a rent-a-car (reserved with hertz) myself to the hotel you booked for me.

As for the workshop on 19th, should I visit your company directly? I would be glad if you could give me any advice for preparations necessary for the workshop.

Thank you.

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I will be moving to SF within 17th, and will be heading for Atlanta via LA in the morning of 18th. Arriving at Atlanta at 1:35pm, I will rent a car (reserved with hertz) and drive myself to the hotel you booked for me.

Should I visit your company directly for the workshop on 19th?↵
I would be glad to have your advice if there is any preparations necessary for the workshop.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
Even just from your current inventory, please select and send the best condition ring with clearly marked engravings on the inside.

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From your current inventory, please select and send the best condition ring with clearly marked engravings inside.