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日本語

アメリカの国旗のデザインを参考モチーフに、色味や模様を製品デザイン構成に取り込みました。アメリカの新大統領も就任しましたが、独立記念日など、シーズナブルな期間限定展開の商品デザインとしていかがでしょうか？

色変更のデザイン提案資料の件、お送りしたものを更に少し解り易く纏め直しましたので、添付ファイルご確認ください。

あと金曜日のM氏との打ち合わせの件、了解しました。事前に金曜日の朝にでも貴方とM氏とのミーティング前に作戦会議しますか？　必要であれば金曜朝打ち合わせしましょう。

英語

For the motif referencing the design of the American flag, we adopted it's color and pattern for the composition of the product design. The new American President was inaugurated, but what do you think about putting out the product design for a limited time during the season, such as the Independence holiday?

As for the materials proposing a design with a different color, I summarized it in what I sent so that it was even easier to understand, so could you please check the attached file.

Also, as for the preparatory meeting with Mr. M on Friday, I understand. Are you having a strategy meeting beforehand with Mr. M on Friday morning before the meeting? If necessary I'll make advance arrangements on Friday morning.

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light15はこの翻訳結果を"★★★★"と評価しました 2017/01/27 07:11:47

元の翻訳
For the motif referencing the design of the American flag, we adopted it's color and pattern for the composition of the product design. The new American President was inaugurated, but what do you think about putting out the product design for a limited time during the season, such as the Independence holiday?

As for the materials proposing a design with a different color, I summarized it in what I sent so that it was even easier to understand, so could you please check the attached file.

Also, as for the preparatory meeting with Mr. M on Friday, I understand. Are you having a strategy meeting beforehand with Mr. M on Friday morning before the meeting? If necessary I'll make advance arrangements on Friday morning.

修正後
Using/Taking the design of the American flag as the motif referencing, we adopted it's color and pattern for the composition of the product design. The new American President was inaugurated, but what do you think about putting out the product design for a limited time during the season, such as the Independence holiday?

As for the materials proposing a design with a different color, I summarized it in what I sent so that it was even easier to understand, so could you please check the attached file.

Also, as for the preparatory meeting with Mr. M on Friday, I understand. Are you having a strategy meeting on Friday morning, prior to the meeting with Mr. M? If necessary I'll make advance arrangements on Friday morning.

Good translation!
Just a few comments:
- First sentence, there's no word that indicates the flag design in being used as the motif reference. So changing the word order or adding "using/taking" could make it sound more natural. Some examples could be "Using the design of the American flag...", "For the motif...the American flag was used...", or "For the motif referencing we used the...flag, and adopted it's color..."
- The last paragraph, I feel you may have misunderstood the original sentence. (Apologies if I am wrong.) The original text 事前に…M氏とのミーティングの前に means that the strategy meeting is happening prior the meeting with Mr M. In this strategy meeting, Mr M is not present.

I hope this makes sense, and is helpful to you!