翻訳者レビュー ( 日本語 → 英語 )

日本語

画面上へスワイプしてそばを喰らえ。満腹度が上がれば満員電車に乗る準備もできるだろう。空腹のまま乗車する？それは死を意味する。

しかし早急に腹を満たそうとすると熱々なそばによるダメージを受けてしまう。ヤケドによるライフの減少は死を意味する。やみくもにそばをかき込むのはNGだ、ライフと歩調を合わせ的確な飲食を心掛けよ。

遅刻を恐れて大急ぎでそばを口に運ぶ仲間たち、次々とその場で倒れてしまう。仲間を失うのは、チームを率いる者にとってこれほどの哀しさはない。しかしこれこそが戦場なのだ。

英語

Swipe to the top of the screen and eat your Soba! Once you're full, you'll be ready to get in to the packed train. Riding the bus hungry? That means death.

But if you try to full yourself too fast, you'll take damage from the super-hot Soba. Losing your Life from burn injuries means death. Don't eat your Soba without thinking, try to manage your damage according to your Life as you eat and drink.

Your friends, afraid of being late, eat their Soba in a hurry, and fall at their feet. Losing your friend is the worst thing you can imagine for a leader, leading a crowd. But, this is what a battlefield is.

レビュー ( 1 )

yxn667はこの翻訳結果を"★★★★"と評価しました 2015/02/05 19:51:01

元の翻訳
Swipe to the top of the screen and eat your Soba! Once you're full, you'll be ready to get in to the packed train. Riding the bus hungry? That means death.

But if you try to full yourself too fast, you'll take damage from the super-hot Soba. Losing your Life from burn injuries means death. Don't eat your Soba without thinking, try to manage your damage according to your Life as you eat and drink.

Your friends, afraid of being late, eat their Soba in a hurry, and fall at their feet. Losing your friend is the worst thing you can imagine for a leader, leading a crowd. But, this is what a battlefield is.

修正後
Swipe to the top of the screen and eat your Soba! Once you're full, you'll be ready to get in to the packed train. Riding the train when hungry? That means death.

But if you try to full yourself too fast, you'll take damage from the super-hot Soba. Losing your Life from burn injuries means death. Don't eat your Soba without thinking, try to manage your damage according to your Life as you eat and drink.

Your friends, afraid of being late, eat their Soba in a hurry, and fall at their feet. Losing your friend is the worst thing you can imagine for a leader, leading a crowd. But, this is what a battlefield is.

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"when"はいらないと思います。