翻訳者レビュー ( 日本語 → 英語 )

評価: 59 / 1 Review / 2014/06/10 20:13:21

larissad33
larissad33 59 はじめまして。 日本語ネイティブです。 英語⇔日本語の翻訳ができま...
日本語

次のステップとして、このタームシートを先方に提示し、交渉を始めたいと思います。当初の予定ではAをDに添付する予定でしたが、Dの締結交渉を早く終わらせる必要があることから(交渉期限は今年末まで)、とりあえずこのタームシートを締結してAの締結を後回しにしたいと思います。タームシートを締結すれば(Aの締結がD締結より後になっても)当方に不利益は生じる可能性は低いものと考えていますが、そのような理解でよろしいでしょうか?

英語

As the next step, I would like to propose this term sheet and start negotiation. Although it was planned to attach A to D, I would like to first conclude this term sheet before concluding A, for the negotiation for conclusion of D needs to be done fast (the negotiation limit is until the end of this year). If we conclude the term sheet (even the concluding A is after concluding D), I believe the possibility of us receiving disadvantage is low, but would it be fair to say so?

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acdcasic 60 こんにちは、遠藤です。日⇔英訳対応が可能なバイリンガルで、翻訳歴は5年です...
acdcasicはこの翻訳結果を"★★★★"と評価しました 2014/06/12 02:12:03

元の翻訳
As the next step, I would like to propose this term sheet and start negotiation. Although it was planned to attach A to D, I would like to first conclude this term sheet before concluding A, for the negotiation for conclusion of D needs to be done fast (the negotiation limit is until the end of this year). If we conclude the term sheet (even the concluding A is after concluding D), I believe the possibility of us receiving disadvantage is low, but would it be fair to say so?

修正後
As the next step, I would like to propose this term sheet and start the negotiation. Although it was planned to attach A to D, I would like to first conclude this term sheet before concluding A, because the negotiation for conclusion of D needs to be done fast (the negotiation deadline is the end of this year). If we conclude the term sheet (even if the concluding A is after concluding D), I believe it will very unlikely be our disadvantage, but would it be fair to say so?

最後の部分を直訳からもう少し自然にしてみました。いかがでしょう

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larissad33 larissad33 2014/06/12 13:16:32

最後の一文で悩みました。ご指摘のとおりの表現が、とても自然ですね。ありがとうございます。

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