Translator Reviews ( Japanese → English )

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Japanese

はじめまして。
突然の連絡大変失礼します。

価格交渉の件で連絡しています。

あなた（貴社）が販売している商品ですが、
送料込で合計**ドルで購入できませんか。

値引可能でしたら、お金はpaypal経由で24時間以内に即支払います。

また、もし価格交渉が可能でしたら、
今後も継続して購入を考えています。

お忙しい所恐れ入りますが
ご検討の程よろしくお願いいたします。

English

How do you do?
I hope that you do not mind my sudden contacting.
I am contacting you regarding the price negotiation.

As for the item that your company sells,
may I purchase by xx dollars in total including the shipping charge?
If you can give me a discount, I will pay via Paypal within 24 hours.

If I can negotiate the price, I am considering purchasing continuously.
I hate to ask you while you are busy, but I appreciate if you consider it.

I

Reviews ( 1 )

yxn667 rated this translation result as ★★★★ 12 Feb 2015 at 09:38

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How do you do?
I hope that you do not mind my sudden contacting.
I am contacting you regarding the price negotiation.

As for the item that your company sells,
may I purchase by xx dollars in total including the shipping charge?
If you can give me a discount, I will pay via Paypal within 24 hours.

If I can negotiate the price, I am considering purchasing continuously.
I hate to ask you while you are busy, but I appreciate if you consider it. ↵
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I

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How do you do?
I hope that you do not mind my sudden contacting.
I am contacting you regarding the price negotiation.

As for the item that your company sells,
may I purchase at xx dollars in total including the shipping charge?
If you can give me a discount, I will pay via Paypal within 24 hours.

If I can negotiate the price, I am considering purchasing continuously.
I hate to ask you while you are busy, but I appreciate if you consider it.