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Japanese

今日我々は日本の銀行よりあなたへ海外送金を試みました。
しかし、こちらの銀行から情報が不足しているのでこれでは送金できないと言われました。

我々はあなたへ送金するために、あなたの銀行の情報が必要です
以下の情報を私に教えてください

・あなたの銀行　の支店名
・あなたの銀行　の住所
・あなたの銀行　の国名
・受取人　の指名
・受取人　の住所
・受取人　の国名

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English

We have tried to make remittance to your bank from our bank in Japan, and but we were not able to complete the process as some of the information required was missing.

In order for us to further process this remittance, we need the information on your bank, so please give us the following information:
Branch name of your bank:
Address of your bank;
The country where your bank is located:
Payee name:
Payee address:
Payee country:

We apologize for any inconvenience this may have caused you, but please make sure to fill in all information provided above.

We will remit the money as soon as we receive your response

Best regards,

Reviews ( 1 )

iluvsnoopy228 rated this translation result as ★★★ 05 Feb 2014 at 00:47

original
We have tried to make remittance to your bank from our bank in Japan, and but we were not able to complete the process as some of the information required was missing.

In order for us to further process this remittance, we need the information on your bank, so please give us the following information:
Branch name of your bank:
Address of your bank;
The country where your bank is located:
Payee name:
Payee address:
Payee country:

We apologize for any inconvenience this may have caused you, but please make sure to fill in all information provided above.

We will remit the money as soon as we receive your response

Best regards,

corrected
We have tried to send the remittance from our bank in Japan to you, but we were not able to complete the process as some of the information required were missing.

In order for us to further process this remittance, we need the information on your bank, so please provide us with the following information:
Branch name of your bank:
Address of your bank;
The country where your bank is located:
Payee name:
Payee address:
Payee country:

We apologize for any inconvenience this may have caused you, but please make sure to fill in all the information mentioned above.

We will remit the money as soon as we receive your response

Best regards,

Just some sentence flow corrections. nonetheless it was a good translation

[chee_madam]

Hi there, I appreciate your taking some time to make corrections, but let me say that it was more of the issues with word choices than the CORRECTION. For example, "make remittance" is used as equally as "send remittance".