Translator Reviews ( Japanese → English )

Japanese

返送先の確認をいたしたくメールいたしました。返送先は下記でよろしいでしょうか？
また電話番号の記載がなかったのですが教えていただけませんか？
送り状に記載することが必須になっていますので。
よろしくお願いいたします。

English

I'm writing to you to confirm the return address. Is the return address below correct?
Also, I couldn't find your telephonen number, will you let me know your phone number?
Phone number must be written in the waybill.
Thank you in adavance.

Reviews ( 1 )

[deleted user] rated this translation result as ★★ 13 Feb 2013 at 10:48

There are two typos - "telephonen" should be "telephone", and "adavance" should be "advance".
"Also, I couldn't find your telephone number. Would/will you (please) let me know your phone number?" << As it's written above, the sentence is actually a run-on. Also, "will you let me know" is not quite as polite as 教えていただけませんか is.
"phone number" in the third sentence also requires "the" in English.

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