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元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply.
I just informed you the tracking number, but I have sent out before you contacted me.
In other words, there was a time lag between the shipment and the processing on eBay.
I could stop the shipment if you have contacted me earlier.
I'm afraid I couldn't respond to your request.
Thank you.

I apology I couldn't respond to your request this time.

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Thank you for your reply.
I just informed you the tracking number, but I have sent out before you contacted me.
In other words, there was a time lag between the shipment and the processing on eBay.
I could have stopped the shipment if you had contacted me earlier.
I'm afraid I cannot respond to your request.
Thank you.

I apologize that I cannot respond to your request this time.

元の翻訳
I would like to make 50 of your products, could you please send your quotation in case you print on this products(Mae Bells) and send them to Japan?

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I would like to make 50 of your products, could you please send your quotation in case you print on these products (Mae Bells) and send them to Japan?

元の翻訳
Is it really Responsive? The width of Pop Up can be changed even if I adjust the width of the browser narrow.
Also it is good to display movies such like YouTube.

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Is it really Responsive? The width of Pop Up cannot be changed even if I adjust the width of the browser narrow.
Also it is good to display movies such as YouTube.

元の翻訳
It's convenient.
I joined with my families in total of 6 people. It's very convenient so that we can go around Madrid effectively.
Also it was good to know the distance in town for walking the next day.
I recommend it to everyone.

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It's convenient.
I joined with my families in total of 6 people. It's very convenient so that we can go around Madrid effectively.
Also it was good to know the sense of distance in town for walking the next day.
I recommend it to everyone.

元の翻訳
Stock is stored in our company-owned warehouse with classified by manufacturers. All items are attached bar code which is output in-house.
Out of stock can be prevent by reading the bar code and checking the quantity when receiving and shipping items.

We have mainly sold on Japanese auction site and internet malls such like Rakuten for 5 years.

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Classified by manufacturers, stock is stored in our company-owned warehouse. All items are attached bar codes which are output [usage] in-house.
Out of stock can be prevented by reading the bar code and checking the quantity [awkward] when we receive and ship items.

We have mainly sold on Japanese auction sites and internet malls such as Rakuten for 5 years.↵

元の翻訳
Price: 5,200 Yen / person (including sarvice charge and tax)

To buy a ticket, please follow the below link.

*Ticket PIA
http://artist.pia.jp/pia/artists.do?artistsCd=C3140004

The tickets for general public will be released at
10 a.m. on January 1 2015 (Thursday, National Holiday)!

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Price: 5,200 Yen / person (including service charge and tax)

To buy a ticket, please follow the below link.

*Ticket PIA
http://artist.pia.jp/pia/artists.do?artistsCd=C3140004

Tickets for the general public will be released at
10 am on January 1st, 2015 (Thursday, National Holiday)!

元の翻訳
Booking for Kodagumi members http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/140131kuu3/
Booking for playroom members http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/140131kuu4/

*｢Dance In The Rain｣Special Site
http://rhythmzone.net/koda/ditr/
*｢Dance In The Rain｣Spot
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e6r-OK8NIqs

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Booking for KUMI KODA members http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/140131kuu3/
Booking for playroom members http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/140131kuu4/

*｢Dance In The Rain｣Special Site
http://rhythmzone.net/koda/ditr/
*｢Dance In The Rain｣Spot
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e6r-OK8NIqs

元の翻訳
Various riddles from person to person
A riddle with a same answer will change by the people who make it.
For example, in case you make people a riddle which the answer is glasses, someone make it of 'What is it which has two windows and two hands?', and the other make it of 'What is it which uses on your eyes, ears, and nose?'.
In this way, it is possible to find a value which you did not notice yourself by looking at riddles which other people made.

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Various riddles from person to person
A riddle with a same answer will change by the people who make it.
For example, in case you make people a riddle which the answer is glasses, someone make it of 'What is it which has two windows and two hands?', and the other make it of 'What is it which uses your eyes, ears, and nose?'.
In this way, it is possible to find a value which you did not notice yourself by looking at riddles which other people made.

元の翻訳
I've attached the INVOICE of the following three packages as below.
I think the part surrounded by a red circle is the relevant products.

I already sent the INVOICE of all packages arrived from A yesterday.
I've attached it in the e-mail as well.

B which is shown the INVOICE of the order on 2 Dec is not included in the packages arrived this time.
All the other products perhaps arrived yesterday.

SInce the all products I ordered are not shown in the Description, I am not be able to inform the detailed Purchased Value.

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I've attached the INVOICE of the following three packages as below.
I think the part surrounded by a red circle is the relevant products.

I have already sent the INVOICE of all packages arrived from A yesterday.
I've attached it in the e-mail as well.

B which is shown the INVOICE of the order on 2 Dec is not included in the packages arrived this time.
All the other products perhaps arrived yesterday.

SInce the all products I ordered are not shown in the Description, I am not be able to inform the detailed Purchased Value.

元の翻訳
Regarding the two of VERSA putter, I'm going to buy one each.
Please reserve it as I would like to confirm about the spec tomorrow.
Also, I might buy one AR.7 as well.

Regarding Versa 9HT, I paid by Paypal today.
Please dispatch it to Japan with AR.7.

Regarding 815Driver, after checking with the client, I got a contact of cancellation as the price is not suit this time. It would be great if you would contact me when you get it with cheaper price.

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Regarding the two VERSA putters, I'm going to buy one each.
Please reserve them as I would like to confirm the specs tomorrow.
Also, I might buy one AR.7 as well.

Regarding the Versa 9HT, I paid by PayPal today.
Please dispatch it to Japan with the AR.7.

Regarding [repetitive] the 815 Driver, after checking with the client, I got [more specific verb] a contact of cancellation [awkward] as the price is not suit [parts of speech confusion] this time. It would be great if you would contact me when you get it with [wrong proposition] a cheaper price.↵

元の翻訳
リアルタイムでの対応

貴方の要件ごとに受注の処理時間を調整することができます – 私たちはリアルタイムで受注に対応いたします。

詳細な報告と分析

私たちのサービスでは、誰が貴方のお客様であるかだけでなく、彼らが何をどこで購入しているかを知ることができます – 加えてより多くのことを。

専用プログラム　マイクロサイト

全てのプログラムが、プログラム説明書とユーザーがステータスの確認や、提案を閲覧／検索するなどの機能付きのモバイルサイト専用プログラムを用意しています。

提案ステータス通知

お客様はプログラムの各段階で通知を受けることで、専用モバイルサイト経由で提案ステータスの完全な透明性を確保できます。

多彩な方法でとても便利

私たちのソリューションはとても汎用性があります。消費者との意思疎通は万全です。

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リアルタイムでの対応

貴方の要件ごとに受注の処理時間を調整することができます – 私たちはリアルタイムでの受注対応も可能です。

詳細な報告と分析

私たちのサービスでは、誰が貴方のお客様であるかだけでなく、彼らが何をどこで購入しているかなど、より多くのことを知ることができます。

専用プログラム　マイクロサイト

全てのプログラムが、説明書つきの専用モバイルサイトや、ユーザーがステータスの確認や提案等を閲覧・検索できる機能性を装備しています。

提案ステータス通知

お客様はプログラムの各段階で通知を受けることで、専用モバイルサイト経由で提案ステータスの完全な透明性を確保できます。

多彩な方法でとても便利

私たちのソリューションはとても汎用性があります。消費者との意思疎通は万全です。

元の翻訳
５．貴社のサービスを利用する際、私の個人情報はどのように保護されるのでしょうか。私は主に個人情報保護について懸念しています。
サービス契約規約には会社として署名する機密保持条項が含まれています。我々はまた、貴社が用意するいかなる機密保持契約にもサインすることができます。

６．我々はお客様のプライバシーを非常に大切にし、お客様の個人情報を保護するための対策を行っています。我々は既に利用規約内に、お客様の個人を特定できる情報を公開したり販売したりしないという機密保持条項を含めています。さらに貴社が我々のダッシュボード経由で我々と共有する情報はSSLによって保護されていますので、すべてのデータは暗号化された形式で保管されます。

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５．貴社のサービスを利用する際、私の個人情報はどのように保護されるのでしょうか。私は主に個人情報保護について懸念しています。
サービス契約規約には会社として署名する機密保持条項が含まれています。我々はまた、あなた（もしくはお客様）が用意するいかなる機密保持契約にもサインすることができます。

６．我々はお客様のプライバシーを非常に大切にし、お客様の個人情報を保護するための対策を行っています。我々は既に利用規約内に、お客様の個人を特定できる情報を公開したり販売したりしないという機密保持条項を含めています。さらにあなた（もしくはお客様）が我々のダッシュボード経由で我々と共有する情報はSSLによって保護されていますので、すべてのデータは暗号化された形式で保管されます。