kazushi — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
ACLUがNSAを対象としたのは初めてではありません。
ー2007年、米国控訴裁判所がACLUに対して最終的に当事者適格の欠如という判決をした「テロリスト監視プログラム」(TSP)の関連機関に対するケースー
原告を規定する法的概念は十分な「害」を示せなければならない。
その場合の当事者が再び欠けることが判明したため、2013年のクラッパーv.アムネスティ·インターナショナルUSAとして知られる事例では、米国最高裁判所が再びFAAへの挑戦を却下した。

修正後
ACLUがNSAを対象としたのはこれが初めてではありません。
－2007年、米国控訴裁判所がACLUに対して最終的に当事者適格の欠如という判決をした「テロリスト監視プログラム」(TSP)の関連機関に対するケース－
原告を規定する法的概念は十分な「害」を示せなければならない。
その場合の当事者が再び欠けることが判明したため、2013年のクラッパーv.アムネスティ·インターナショナルUSAとして知られる事例では、米国最高裁判所が再びFAAへの挑戦を却下した。

元の翻訳
The Rennkei temple has one of Sixteen Arhats(sixteen great disciples of Buddha) called Obinzuru, also known as stroked Buddha.
He helped the person who is handicapped or didease in the divine power, Chastened greedy people and curmudgeon, preached the teachings of Buddha to people who has worries in mind,and saved a lot of people.

It is said that if you stroke yourself with your hand which you touched the body of Obinzuru by, your disease heal and you become smarter. This is the origin of the stroked Buddha.
We repaint once every twenty five years because Obinzuru in Rennkei temple is stroked by a lot of people.

修正後
The Rennkei temple has one of Sixteen Arhats(sixteen great disciples of Buddha) called Obinzuru, also known as stroked Buddha.
He helped the person who is handicapped or disease in the divine power, Chastened greedy people and curmudgeon, preached the teachings of Buddha to people who have worries in mind, and saved a lot of people.

It is said that if you stroke yourself with your hand which you touched the body of Obinzuru by, your disease heals and you become smarter. This is the origin of the stroked Buddha.
They repaint once every twenty five years because Obinzuru in Rennkei temple is stroked by a lot of people.

元の翻訳
Thank you for visit yesterday.

I can hear your great products and an overview of the company,
and answer for my questions and requests,
so we are delighted to be able to spend a very meaningful time.
Thank you !

It is at once, Would you please send the offered contents which I ask you in the talk yesterday by e-mail ?

· Photos of sales floor (Luxury department store in each country)
· Image Photo
· Product Photos (photo of each deployment item with name)
· Photo illustration that was coordinated wealthy (if possible)
· Movie
· Photos of factory

修正後
Thank you for visit yesterday.

I can hear your great products and an overview of the company,
and answer for my questions and requests,
so we are delighted to be able to spend a very meaningful time.
Thank you !

To start with, Would you please send the offered contents which I ask you in the talk yesterday by e-mail ?

· Photos of sales floor (Luxury department store in each country)
· Image Photo
· Product Photos (photo of each deployment item with name)
· Photo illustration that was coordinated wealthy (if possible)
· Movie
· Photos of factory