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元の翻訳
●Reason for the problem
・The delivery is too late.

●Solutions for preventing such a problem
・Set a time schedule for every day to deal with all the customer responses.
・Aim for shorter lead times.
・Inventory management.
・Communications with buyers.
・Policy violation.
・Prohibited contents and/or restricted items.

●Appeal
I will work very hard following the submitted sale plan so all the buyers will be pleased by my service.
I'm hoping that you can regain the right for the sell.
I also strongly hope that A will prosper.
Good luck for you.

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●Reason for the problem
・Late delivery

●Solutions for preventing problem re-occurrence
・Set up a time schedule for every day to deal with all the customer responses.
・Aim for shorter lead times
・Inventory management
・Communication with buyers
・Policy violation
・Prohibited contents and/or restricted items

●Appeal
I will work very hard following the submitted sale plan so all the buyers will be pleased by my service.
I'm hoping for the reinstatement of the selling rights.
I also strongly hope that A will prosper.
Good luck for you.

元の翻訳
JOYSOUND Present Campaign the 2nd in now progress!

"TVXQ×JOYSOUND Collaboration Campaign the 2nd" is now in progress!
Sing with the live video and get the "TVXQ LIVE TOUR 2014 ～TREE～" special prensent with the TVXQ's autograph
Check the campaign web site for more details!


【Campaign Web Site URL】
http://joysound.com/st/toho2014/

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JOYSOUND Present Campaign the 2nd in now progress!

"TVXQ×JOYSOUND Collaboration Campaign the 2nd" is now in progress!
Sing with the live video and get the "TVXQ LIVE TOUR 2014 ～TREE～" special present with the TVXQ's autograph
Check the campaign web site for more details!


【Campaign Web Site URL】
http://joysound.com/st/toho2014/

元の翻訳
I sent everything back to you. I guess they will be stuck in customs.
In that case, I have to wrap them up and send again to follow their rule (only 2As for each box).
The shipping fee will cost twice or three times as normal.

Anyways I won't compromise anymore.
It's all your fault, so you must to pay me back a half of the shipping fee, alright?
They are brand new? What are your talking about? They are all used. Why don't you even say "I'm sorry" or something?

修正後
I sent everything back to you. I guess they will be stuck in customs though.
In that case, I have to wrap them up and send again to follow their rule (only 2 As for each box).
The shipping fee will cost twice or three times as normal.

Anyways I won't compromise anymore.
It's all your fault, so you should pay me back the returning shipping fee too, alright?
They are brand new? What are your talking about? They are all used. Why haven't you even said "I'm sorry" or something like that?

元の翻訳
S-9 税に関して

もしアマゾンが規約などで規定してると思いますが、もしそうでなくても常識に考えてお分かりになるでしょう。あなたが記載する値段はＶＡＴ、関税、消費税を含む売買に関連した全ての税金を含んでなければならない。

上で述べたことを頭に入れていただいた上で、

(a) もしあなたのビジネスがＥＵに加盟する国で創立されていて且つあなたが我々にＶＡＴ登録番号をご提示いただけるのなら、あなたのビジネスがルクセンブルグで創立されたものでなく且つあなたのＶＡＴ登録番号がルクセンブルグによって発行されたものでないと証明でき、利用規約に則りＶＡＴはアマゾンによって請求されません。

修正後
S-9 税に関して

あなたが同意している規約とは別にアマゾンが同意したということでなければ、あなたがご自身の商品につけていた値段は、売買に関連した送金をするのに、ＶＡＴ、関税、消費税、その他の税などが含まれていなくてはいけません。

上で述べたことを頭に入れていただいた上で、

(a) もしあなたのビジネスがＥＵに加盟する国で創立されていて且つあなたが我々にＶＡＴ登録番号をご提示いただけるのなら、あなたのビジネスがルクセンブルグで創立されたものでなく且つあなたのＶＡＴ登録番号がルクセンブルグによって発行されたものでないと証明でき、利用規約に則りＶＡＴはアマゾンによって請求されません。

元の翻訳
There is no Japanese who call it XYZ. I can't even see any comments calling it XYZ here.
I can't really explain why, but it just sounds weird to me as a Japanese.
I think it's fine if XYZ sounds better for foreigners, but I would prefer ABC.

--

No Japanese would argue over whether this music genre is DEF or not either. Either doesn't hurt anyone, does it?

Well, I personally think that we've created a new genre and the Japanese culture which can generate such a creative idea is awesome.

修正後
There is no Japanese who call it XYZ. I can't even see any comments calling it XYZ here.
I can't really explain why, but it just sounds weird to me as a Japanese.
I think it's fine if XYZ sounds better for foreigners, but I would prefer ABC.

--

No Japanese would argue over whether this music genre is DEF or not. Neither hurts anyone, does it?

Well, I personally think that we've created a new genre and the Japanese culture which can generate such a creative idea is awesome.

元の翻訳
"A" is a shop for hats and other miscellaneous goods.
These hats have their own stories that make you want to tell others.
Most materials for our hats are all original!
The design created from these wonderful materials might have little tricks like a hidden pocket.
It even brightens the mood of your room if you just leave it there.
You will be amazed by how charming they are!
We will bring you to the wonderful world of hats.

修正後
"A" is a shop for hats and other miscellaneous goods.
These hats have their own stories that make you want to tell others.
Most materials for our hats are original!
The design created from these wonderful materials might have little tricks like a hidden pocket.
It even brightens the mood of your room if you just leave it there.
You will be amazed by how charming they are!
We will bring you to the wonderful world of hats.

元の翻訳
The shipping cost for the return for any reasons except for defects is burdened by the purchaser.
However, we can make an exception for you and pay $5 back if you did not like the product.
The product is a kitchen appliance, so you can only return it if you have not used it at all.
Please note that the refund is be processed after the product has reached here.
You can also purchase this one if you like it.
Thank you.

修正後
The shipping cost for the return for any reasons except for defects is burdened by the purchaser.
However, we can make an exception for you and pay $5 back if you did not like the product.
The product is a kitchen appliance, so you can only return it if you have not used it at all.
Please note that the refund will be processed after the product has reached here.
You can also purchase this one if you like it.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
-May 31st (Sat)
"Jujika ～The Movie 'Gakkou no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-' Ver.～" mu-mo Version Individual Sign Event
Place: Avex Building

-June 1st (Sun)
"Jujika ～The Movie 'Gakkou no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-' Ver.～" mu-mo Version Individual Sign Event
Place: Avex Building

-June 3rd (Tue)
"Killing Me Softly" Release Celebration Mini Live & Shake-Hands Event
Place: Lalaport Toyosu

-June 4th (Wed)
"Killing Me Softly" Release Celebration Mini Live & Shake-Hands Event
Place: Nishinomiya Gardens

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-May 31st (Sat)
"Jujika ～The Movie 'Gakkou no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-' Ver.～" mu-mo Version Individual Autograph Event
Place: Avex Building

-June 1st (Sun)
"Jujika ～The Movie 'Gakkou no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-' Ver.～" mu-mo Version Individual Autograph Event
Place: Avex Building

-June 3rd (Tue)
"Killing Me Softly" Release Celebration Mini Live & Shake-Hands Event
Place: Lalaport Toyosu

-June 4th (Wed)
"Killing Me Softly" Release Celebration Mini Live & Shake-Hands Event
Place: Nishinomiya Gardens

元の翻訳
-May 31st (Sat)
"Jujika ～The Movie 'Gakkou no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-' Ver.～" mu-mo Version Individual Sign Event
Place: Avex Building

-June 1st (Sun)
"Jujika ～The Movie 'Gakkou no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-' Ver.～" mu-mo Version Individual Sign Event
Place: Avex Building

-June 3rd (Tue)
"Killing Me Softly" Release Celebration Mini Live & Shake-Hands Event
Place: Lalaport Toyosu

-June 4th (Wed)
"Killing Me Softly" Release Celebration Mini Live & Shake-Hands Event
Place: Nishinomiya Gardens

修正後
-May 31st (Sat)
"Jujika ～The Movie 'Gakkou no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-' Ver.～" mu-mo Version Individual Autograph Event
Place: Avex Building

-June 1st (Sun)
"Jujika ～The Movie 'Gakkou no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-' Ver.～" mu-mo Version Individual Autograph Event
Place: Avex Building

-June 3rd (Tue)
"Killing Me Softly" Release Celebration Mini Live & Shake-Hands Event
Place: Lalaport Toyosu

-June 4th (Wed)
"Killing Me Softly" Release Celebration Mini Live & Shake-Hands Event
Place: Nishinomiya Gardens