Edgar Guevara (mredo) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
Coming out from the back, a Camellia-centric garden with flowers from all four seasons as well as a Camellia foot-bath come into view.
After enjoying a nice walk around Kawagoe, it's nice to take a breather in this peaceful, little oasis.

Entering the fist floor, one can enjoy a rich ginger ale and ginger tea at "Kura Ginger" (ginger-cellar))The ginger used is all grown in Japan. One can also enjoy the red bean-filled yam bread, a Kawagoe specialty. Only one-hundred are backed each day, so get them while they're hot!
The joining of "Kura-Ginger" and the Camellia foot-bath into the "Ashi-yu Bar" (foot-bath Bar) is this establishment's man attraction.

修正後
Coming out from the back, a Camellia-centric garden with flowers from all four seasons as well as a Camellia foot-bath come into view.
After enjoying a nice walk around Kawagoe, it's nice to take a breather in this peaceful, little oasis.

Entering the first floor, one can enjoy a rich ginger ale and ginger tea at "Kura Ginger" (ginger-cellar))The ginger used is all grown in Japan. One can also enjoy the red bean-filled yam bread, a Kawagoe specialty. Only one-hundred are backed each day.
The joining of "Kura-Ginger" and the Camellia foot-bath into the "Ashi-yu Bar" (foot-bath Bar) is this establishment's man attraction.

元の翻訳
This way to Asia Progress Official Site↵
【URL】http://www.asia-progress2014.com/

Schedule：2014/8/14（Thursday）
Opens16:00 / begins17:00
Hall：Tokyo - National Yoyogi Stadium
Stage Performers：AAA（Japan）/ Da-iCE（Japan）/ FUTURE BOYZ（Japan） / Lead（Japan）/ROOT FIVE(Sun) / SOLIDEMO（Japan）/TEAM H（Korea）/ U-KISS（Korea）/Wilber Pan（Tiwan）/w-inds.（Japan）

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Check out the official website of Asia Progress.↵
URL: http://www.asia-progress2014.com/

Date: Thursday, August 14, 2014
Doors at 16:00 / Show at 17:00
Venue: Yoyogi National Stadium First Gymnasium, Tokyo
Artist lineup: AAA (Japan) / Da-iCE (Japan) / FUTURE BOYZ (Japan) / Lead (Japan) / ROOT FIVE (Japan) / SOLIDEMO (Japan) / TEAM H (Korea) / U-KISS (Korea) / Wilber Pan (Taiwan) / w-inds. (Japan)

元の翻訳
【About the performance】
a-nation island Performance secretary：０１８０－９９３－２２３（※Open 24 hours／PHS cell-phones unsupported／internet phones unsupported）

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【Inquiry about the performance】
a-nation island Performance office：０１８０－９９３－２２３（※ Automated voice service around the clock／PHS cell-phones unsupported／internet phones unsupported）