meg6 — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
Thank you for purchese the product.
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Please feel free to contact me what you want on my e-bay site or if you looking for something.
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You can enjoy shopping direct from me with Paypal. In this case, I could discount 10%off.
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Please tell me the number of the product that you want on e-bay.
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My e-mail address is .........↵

Thank you.

修正後
Thank you for purchese [spelling, parts of speech confusion] the product.
Please feel free to contact me if you see what you want on my eBay page or if you [verb missing] looking for something.
You can enjoy shopping direct from me with Paypal. In this case, I could discount 10%off.
Please tell me the product number you want on eBay.
My e-mail address is .........
Thank you.

元の翻訳
こんにちは。
メールありがとうございました。

私はVivere.ltdで卸売受注担当をしております。

最近販売したあなたのサイトを拝見させて頂きたいです。
オンライン上にどのような商品があるか知りたいので、リンクをメールで送って頂けますか？

私共の商品についての他の詳細を、そちらから確認いたします。

お返事お待ちしております。
よろしくお願い申し上げます。

修正後
こんにちは。
メールありがとうございました。

私はVivere.ltdで卸売受注担当をしております。

あなたが現在販売を行なっているサイトを拝見させて頂きたいです。
オンライン上にどのような商品があるか知りたいので、リンクをメールで送って頂けますか？

私共の商品についての他の詳細を、そちらから確認いたします。

お返事お待ちしております。
よろしくお願い申し上げます。

元の翻訳
As well, if your screening accepted safely, we are going to send you member ID and password later.
※It takes about 1 or 3 business days.

We are sorry but, if you un adapted at screening, we will notice you with the resason of why.
To complete your entry, you need to confirm insufficient contents.

We appreciate your understanding.

修正後
As well, if your screening accepted safely [awkward phrasing], we are going to send you a member ID and password later.
※It takes 1-3 business days.

We are sorry but, if you un adapted at screening [incomprehensible], we will notice [wrong verb] you with the resason of why.
To complete your entry, you need to confirm insufficient contents.

We appreciate your understanding.

元の翻訳
As well, if your screening accepted safely, we are going to send you member ID and password later.
※It takes about 1 or 3 business days.

We are sorry but, if you un adapted at screening, we will notice you with the resason of why.
To complete your entry, you need to confirm insufficient contents.

We appreciate your understanding.

修正後
As well, if your screening accepted safely, we are going to send you a member ID and password later.
※ It takes about 1 to 3 business days.

We are sorry but, if you don’t get through the screening, we will notice you with the resason of why.
To complete your entry, you need to confirm insufficient contents.

We appreciate your understanding.