Jeremy (jyebaba) — 付けたレビュー

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Hello, my name is ○○, I live in Japan.
I'm excited to reserve item I really wanted this time.
I'll be looking forward to its release in December.

I have some questions to you.
My brother and friend are eager to buy this item, too.
Is it not possible for me to reserve multiple units at once?
Of course, I will promise I will not cancel them.
Also, if different persons order with same address, is it possible to send them together?

I'm afraid to take your time, but I appreciate your kind consideration.
Thank you in advance for your kind reply.

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Hello, my name is ○○, I live in Japan.
I'm excited to reserve item I really wanted this time.
I'll be looking forward to its release in December.

I have some questions to you.
My brother and friend are eager to buy this item, too.
Is it not possible for me to reserve multiple units at once?
Of course, I will promise I will not cancel them.
Also, if different people order with the same address, is it possible to send them together?

I'm sorry to bother you with my request, but I appreciate your kind consideration.
Thank you in advance for your kind reply.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply.
I understood.
How should I pay?
Can I make a payment on your online store?
Also, I would like to buy pink ones of ..... if you have the stock?
Looking forward to hearing from you. Thanks.

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Thank you for your reply.
I understand.
How should I pay?
Can I make the payment on your online store?
Also, I would like to buy ..... in pink if you have any in stock.
Looking forward to hearing from you. Thanks.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply.
I understand it.
How should I make payment?
Can I make payment at your online store?
I also would like to purchase ●● in pink if you have them in stock.
I'm looking forward to your reply. Thank you.

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Thank you for your reply.
I understand.
How should I make the payment?
Can I make the payment at your online store?
I also would like to purchase ●● in pink if you have them in stock.
I'm looking forward to your reply. Thank you.

元の翻訳
I am very grateful to you for taking up your time when you are busy.
(From our discussion in the meeting the other day) For the concert details that is to be distributed in the newsletter, I have received the introductory draft from the staff at ◯ company.
Although I already had it translated by the natives, if I can somehow get confirmation from you, I would be very grateful.
Also, for the programme on that day, can I have you to include the german and japanese version of this introductory draft, together with the collaboration of ◯.
I sincerely look forward to meeting you in November.
Thank you very much.

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I am very grateful to you for allowing me to take up your time despite your busy schedule.
(From our discussion in the meeting the other day) I am sending the testimonial from ◯ company for the concert details that are to be distributed in the newsletter.
Although I already had it translated by native speakers, I would be very grateful if you would check it for me, just to be sure.
Also, for the programme on that day, can I have you include the German and Japanese version of this testimonial together with the collaboration of ◯?
I sincerely look forward to meeting you in November.
Thank you very much.

元の翻訳
Please keep 8 units of the same item I purchased last week.
In the case of the item produced next time quite late, I will alternate to another item, so please let me know whether you have the item in stock.
Is the state of this item in stock the same with the different item you told me just before?
The items that have been input and are going to be shipped in the web page shows have not arrived straight for 2 weeks. I wonder if the shipping team has forgotten to ship them or they will come altogether.

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Please put on hold 8 units of the same item I purchased last week.
If the production of the next item will still take some time, I intend to change my order to another item, so please let me know whether you have the item in stock.
Is the condition of the item in stock the same as the other item you told me about just a little while ago?
For 2 weeks straight, the items I ordered have shown that they have been input in the web page and are going to be shipped, yet they have not arrived. Do you think the shipping team has forgotten to ship them, or perhaps they will be sent all together?

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Though this "Pink" item looks quite whitish, is the real object "whitish pink"?
Is this image processed bright?
If it is processed as an exposure up, I would like to see the image of the real object without processing.

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Though this "Pink" item looks quite whitish, is the item actually "whitish pink"?
Has this image been altered to appear brighter?
If the image has been altered through image processing methods such as increasing the exposure, I would like to see the unprocessed image of the actual product.

元の翻訳
To whom it may concern in charge of the wholesales,

Greetings, and I hope this message finds you well.
I am ○○, and I run an apparel sales business in Japan.

Today I am reaching you because I want to purchase your brands at a wholesale price.

I sell △ and □ through e-commerce store in Japan.

Currently I make about USD x revenue through the above mentioned e-commerce website each year.

Because your products are extremely attractive to the Japanese customers, I am convinced that our transaction will contribute to your sales, too.

Would you please advise your transaction requirements (in terms of quantity, price, etc.) if any?

Please feel free to contact me if you have any concerns.

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To whom it may concern,

Greetings. I hope this message finds you well.
I am ○○, and I run an apparel sales business in Japan.

Today I am reaching out to you because I want to purchase your brand's items at a wholesale price.

I sell △ and □ through an e-commerce business in Japan.

Currently, I make about US$ x in revenue through the above mentioned e-commerce website each year.

Because your products are extremely attractive to the Japanese customers, I am convinced that our transaction will contribute to your sales, too.

Would you please inform me of your transaction requirements (in terms of quantity, price, etc.) if any?

Please feel free to contact me if you have any concerns.

元の翻訳
To whom it may concern,

I'm contacting you for the first time.
My name is ○○, I sell apparels in Japan.

I contacted you since I'd like to buy your brand items at wholesale price.

I sell △ and □ at EC shops in Japan.

Currently, I sell xUS$ annually on the above EC websites.

Your items are very attractive for Japanese customers, so I'm confident that if I can buy from you I'll be able to contribute to your sales as well.

Please let me know terms and conditions (quantity, price etc.) if there is any.

Please contact me if there is anything that needs to be cleared.

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To whom it may concern,

I'm contacting you for the first time.
My name is ○○, and I sell apparel in Japan.

I contacted you because I'd like to buy your brand's items at wholesale price.

I sell △ and □ on e-commerce websites in Japan.

Currently, I sell xUS$ annually on the above e-commerce websites.

Your items are very attractive for Japanese customers, so I'm confident that if I can buy from you, I'll be able to contribute to your sales as well.

Please let me know the terms and conditions (quantity, price etc.) if there are any.

Please contact me if there is anything that needs to be cleared up.

元の翻訳
I am sorry to be late in contacting you.
An error occurred when I sent money a few days ago.
I want to send it again immediately, but we are on consecutive
holidays in Japan. Then I will send it at the end of this week or beginning of next week.
I will let you know when I finish sending it again.

I have not verified the sample yet since I have been out of town on business recently.

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I am sorry for contacting you so late.
An error occurred when I sent the money a few days ago.
I want to resend it immediately, but we are on consecutive
holidays in Japan, so I am unable to do so. I will send it at the end of this week or the beginning of next week.
I will let you know when I have resent it.

I have not verified the sample yet since I have been out of town on business recently.

元の翻訳
I am sorry for the delay of my reply.
It seems that the money I sent the other day failed.
I want to send it again, but Japan is on holidays now. I could send it to you this weekend or the beginning of next week.
I will contact you again after I finish sending the money again.

As to the inspection of the sample, I have not done yet because I am on the road in a row recently.

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I am sorry for the late reply.
It seems that the money I sent the other day failed to be sent.
I want to resend it, but we are currently in the midst of consecutive holidays in Japan. I could send it to you this weekend or at the beginning of next week.
I will contact you again after I finish resending the money.

As to the inspection of the sample, I have not done yet because I have recently been away on successive business trips.

元の翻訳
We sold ER01 about a week ago, which we had in our storage. However, we had a claimed that it broken soon after the costumer who had purchased it. The condition of ER01 is when you drive the slider in slow speed, it doesn't move smoothly, but it goes choppy. (It reaches until the third on the scale.) The side which doesn't move smooth switched into its direction by some effect. We had a movie clip sent over to us from the customer and we had attached it on this Email. Is it possible for you to see the part where causing a problem? Is it possible to exchange it to a new part for the customer? Please let me know how.

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We sold ER01, which we had in our storage, about a week ago. However, we had received claims that it broke soon after the customer purchased it. The faulty condition of ER01 is that when you push the slider slowly, it doesn't move smoothly, but instead moves choppy (until the third setting on the scale). The side which doesn't move smoothly switches into this direction for some reason. We had a movie clip sent over to us from the customer and we have attached it to this Email. Is it possible for you to figure out the part that is causing the problem? Is it possible to replace it with a new part for the customer? Please let me know how you will address this issue.

元の翻訳
ER01, the product that this company is stocking, started selling about a week ago but, soon after delivery we began to receive claims of initial defects from customers.
We will explain the flawed condition.
The slider did not move smoothly when moved at a slow speed, but instead felt jerky.
(Until the 3rd point on the controller's scale)
However, that was only in one direction. It does not move smoothly in that direction unless it is changed by some kind of rhythm.
We have received videos from customers.
As they were attachments, we will verify them.
Can you conclude what the defective point is?
Can you support us with replacement parts?
Please show us your countermeasure.

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About a week ago, we started selling ER01, a product that our company had been keeping in stock. But soon after delivery, we began to receive claims of initial defects from customers.
We will explain the flawed condition.
The slider did not move smoothly when moved at a slow speed, but instead felt jerky.
(Until the 3rd point on the controller's scale)
However, it was only in one direction. For some reason, it switches into the direction that it does not move smoothly in.
We have received videos from customers.
We have attached these videos, so please verify the aforementioned claims.
Are you able to determine the precise part that is not working properly?
Can you provide us with replacement parts?
Please tell us how you will address this issue.

元の翻訳
Thank you for purchasing at my store this time.

I'm sorry to reply you late due to Japanese holidays.

I checked the stock of these items, and I have new, but would it be all right that it was displayed on counter and it has a little friction mark?

We are looking forward to hearing from you.
Thank you.

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Thank you for your recent purchase our product.

I'm sorry for the late reply as it currently is a holiday in Japan.

I checked the stock of this item, and I do have a new one. But, since it was on display, it shows a little evidence of wear. Is that all right with you?

We are looking forward to hearing from you.
Thank you.↵
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元の翻訳
Thank you for your purchase of our product.
I apologize for the delay of my reply because Japan is now in national holidays.

I checked the inventory of the product and indeed I have a new one in stock. But it is a display in a showcase and it looks worn a little. Would it be okay with you?

I look forward to your reply.
Thank you.

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Thank you for your purchase of our product.
I apologize for the delay of my reply because it is currently a national holiday in Japan.

I checked the inventory of the product and indeed I have a new one in stock. But it is on display in our showcase and it looks a little worn. Is that okay with you?

I look forward to your reply.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
Date of foundation

Capital

Busiiness content

Various information providing services and their sales using internet

Planning, design, and management of information systems and communication networks using internet
Advertising agency

All the related busineses related to the abovementioned

History

A webside that provide information relating to tools that produce music provided its service

A joint venture Soundrope was founded

Our own entity blog media (soundrope.com) was launched

Major customers

Business achievements

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Date of foundation

Capital

Business content

Various information providing services and sales using the Internet

Planning, design, and management of information systems and communication networks using the Internet
Advertising agency

All businesses related to the abovementioned

History

Establishing a website that provides information relating to music production equipment

Founding Soundrope, limited-liability company

Launching our media blog (soundrope.com)

Major customers

Business achievements

元の翻訳
I was not aware that you were also interested in another item. I would like to apologize. Do you collect ○○?
According to the rules of ebay, orders must be shipped within a designated time frame. If I do not ship your order, I will receive a penalty. Therefore, for the time being I have marked your order as having shipped. However, I still have the item on hand, so do not worry. If you purchase the other item, I will include it in the package. Taking a photo of the item will require some time, as it is currently being stored in my partner's warehouse.

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I was not aware that you were also interested in another item. I would like to apologize. Do you collect ○○?
According to the rules of ebay, orders must be shipped within the designated time frame. If I do not ship your order, I will receive a penalty. Therefore, for the time being I have marked your order as having been shipped. However, I still have the item on hand, so do not worry. If you purchase another item, I will include it in the package. Taking a photo of the item will require some time, as it is currently being stored in my partner's warehouse.

元の翻訳
I am troubled very much since last because I cannot complete the payment.

I click (Payments) after choosing (REPORTS) of the (Seller centra) page to find the item of (Payable to Amazon), but I do not know where I should make payment from. Please tell me where.

Also, it says that I would find the button of "Paying back the balance," where do I?
Or is it transcribed in different words? Please tell me.

I am really troubled. I need your help.

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I have been very troubled since last night because I cannot complete the payment.

I clicked (Payments) after selecting (REPORTS) on the (Seller central) page and found the (Payable to Amazon) heading, but I do not know where I should click to make the payment. Please tell me where I should click.

Also, it says that I should be able to see the "Paying back the balance" button. Where do I find this?
Or is it written in different words? Please let me know.

I am really troubled. I need your help.

元の翻訳
Does anyone have a speaker and bring it to the event? Yes, I have a speaker and I can bring it.
How many speakers are needed? How about this one? Is it too big?

You look nice in long and short hair. I am glad that you have arrived in US safely. I am glad that you have arrived home safely.

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Can anyone with a speaker bring it to the event? Yes, I have a speaker and can bring it.
How many speakers are needed? How about this one? Is it too big?

Both short hairstyles and long hairstyles look good on you. I am glad that you have arrived in the US safely. I am glad that you have arrived home safely.