翻訳者レビュー ( 日本語 → 英語 )

日本語

お久しぶりです。私はあなたとお取引を検討しています。
あなたが現在取り扱っている商品の中で日本人によく売れている商品と値段を教えてください。特に私はＡに興味があります。お返事お待ちしています。

英語

It's been a long time. I am considering doing business with you.
Could you tell me the price of some items you treat now and which is sold well for Japanese people. I am especially interested in A. Looking forward your reply.

レビュー ( 4 )

rickoはこの翻訳結果を"★★★★"と評価しました 2013/11/21 10:41:01

元の翻訳
It's been a long time. I am considering doing business with you.
Could you tell me the price of some items you treat now and which is sold well for Japanese people. I am especially interested in A. Looking forward your reply.

修正後
It's been a while. I'd like to consider having business with you.
Could you tell me which is the best sold items for Japanese,and the price of the items that you have now.↵
I am especially interested in A. Looking forward for your reply. Thank you.

イメージの問題なのですが、「It's been a long time」だと「大変ご無沙汰しております」
「It's been a while」だと若干期間が短くなった「お久しぶりです」なので、状況に応じて変えてみては如何でしょう。
business はこの場合、doよりhaveの方がpoliteかもしれません。
「Could you tell me the price of some items you treat now and which is sold well for Japanese people.」だと
「現在取り扱いされている商品の値段と、どの商品が日本人に人気があるか教えてください」と分けて聞いている状態になりますが、問題は無いかと思います。

rollingchopsticksはこの翻訳結果を"★★★★"と評価しました 2013/11/21 10:46:14

元の翻訳
It's been a long time. I am considering doing business with you.
Could you tell me the price of some items you treat now and which is sold well for Japanese people. I am especially interested in A. Looking forward your reply.

修正後
It's been a long time. I am considering doing business with you.
Could you tell me the name and the price of the items that you sell well among Japanese people. I am especially interested in A. Looking forward to your reply.

『商品名』は抜かない方がよいかと思います。

ayaka_maruyamaはこの翻訳結果を"★★★"と評価しました 2013/11/21 11:48:26

元の翻訳
It's been a long time. I am considering doing business with you.
Could you tell me the price of some items you treat now and which is sold well for Japanese people. I am especially interested in A. Looking forward your reply.

修正後
It's been a long time. I am considering doing business with you.
Could you tell me the price of some items you are currently handling and are selling well with Japanese people? I am especially interested in A. Looking forward for your reply.

russ87はこの翻訳結果を"★★★"と評価しました 2014/02/03 17:05:59

元の翻訳
It's been a long time. I am considering doing business with you.
Could you tell me the price of some items you treat now and which is sold well for Japanese people. I am especially interested in A. Looking forward your reply.

修正後
It's been a long time. I am considering doing business with you.
Could you tell me the price of some items you handle now which sell well with Japanese people. I am especially interested in A. Looking forward to your reply.

Not bad but some grammar issues