Translator Reviews ( Japanese → English )

Japanese

11月11日に購入した商品を、本日、私は受け取りましたが、
私が購入した内容とは異なるものでした。

1)
私が購入した商品は、

Black:3
Pink:3
Red:5
White:2
Rose Pink:2


2)
本日、私が受け取った商品は、

Black:2
Pink:2
Red:3
White:2
Rose Pink:2
Blue:1



3)
私は11月19日にあらたに商品を購入しています。

Light Pink:2
Blue:2

English

I have received the items I purchased on November 11th, but those items were not what I ordered.
1)
The items that I purchased were as follows.

Black:3
Pink:3
Red:5
White:2
Rose Pink:2


2)
The items that I received today were as follows:

Black:2
Pink:2
Red:3
White:2
Rose Pink:2
Blue:1



3)
I have additionally ordered items on November 19th as follows..

Light Pink:2
Blue:2

Reviews ( 1 )

glenwp rated this translation result as ★★★★ 26 Nov 2013 at 22:39

original
I have received the items I purchased on November 11th, but those items were not what I ordered.
1)
The items that I purchased were as follows.

Black:3
Pink:3
Red:5
White:2
Rose Pink:2


2)
The items that I received today were as follows:

Black:2
Pink:2
Red:3
White:2
Rose Pink:2
Blue:1



3)
I have additionally ordered items on November 19th as follows..

Light Pink:2
Blue:2

corrected
I have received the items I purchased on November 11th, but those items were different from what I had ordered.
1)
The items that I purchased are as follows.

Black:3
Pink:3
Red:5
White:2
Rose Pink:2


2)
The items that I received today are as follows:

Black:2
Pink:2
Red:3
White:2
Rose Pink:2
Blue:1



3)
I have additionally ordered items on November 19th as follows..

Light Pink:2
Blue:2

Would it be better to phrase the first line this way? Nonetheless, good translation!

[tani1973]

Thank you for correction, Glen. I appreciate it.