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元の翻訳
Befor WW2, firewoods were the first choice for the source of energy and mainly provided for theirselves in farming areas. Energy costs were relatively low since abundant fuel was provided for theirselves. Suppose price effect enabled households to use more energy, it cannot be said that households were saving energy before WW2. Moreover, since households used conventional energy, compny could use newer energy (electricity and gas) not conpeting with households.

修正後
In prewar Japan, firewoods were the majority of the source of energy for long time,were used since premodernization and were mainly provided for themselves in farming areas. Energy costs were relatively low since self-providing fuel was abundant. Suppose price effect enabled households to use more energy, it cannot be said that households were saving energy in prewar Japan. Moreover, By the means of using conventional energy such as fire woods and charcoal, company could use rare and modern energy (electricity and gas) without competition with households.

元の翻訳
I am very sorry.
I have forgotten packging the product with a wodden box when I sent it today.
I protected the product with other materials so rigidly that the content is safe.
The wooden box will be sent alone tomorrow and I will send an e-mail then.
I am very sorry again.

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Today, I sent the box (tracking number: ○○)
I will arrive a day after ○○.
Please do not hesitate to ask me whenever you have ny question.

修正後
I am very sorry.
I have forgotten to pack the wooden box with your order when I sent it today.
I protected the product with packaging materials very rigidly to ensure that the contents are safe.
The wooden box will be sent alone tomorrow and I will send an e-mail then.
Once again, I am very sorry.

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Today, I sent the box (tracking number: ○○)
I will arrive a day after ○○.
Please do not hesitate to ask me whenever you have any question.