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元の翻訳
ワォ、郵便局の話では、4ポンド（約1.8ｋｇ）以下に抑えれば、国際小包料金は40ドルぐらいになるとのことです。私としては必ず4ポンド以下におさめめます。私はこれを梱包します。（小包をあなたに）送ったら、合計金額、領収書の写真及び追跡番号をメールで送ります。ありがとう、J Hill

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郵便局の話では、4ポンド（約1.8ｋｇ）未満に抑えれば、国際小包料金は40ドルになるとのことです。私としては必ず4ポンド未満におさめます。私はこれを梱包してもらいます。（小包をあなたに）送ったら、合計金額、領収書と追跡番号の写真をメールで送ります。ありがとう、J Hill

元の翻訳
後ろ側のキャップには明瞭に「キャノン用トキナレンズ」と印字されており、それゆえ、あなたがどうして「ソニー・ミノルタ」マウント用レンズと間違えたのか理解に苦しみます。私としては、少なくとも購入金額（＄252）に加え、もともとの送料（＄20）の返金及び返送用送料（金額は決まってませんが）の負担をお願いしたいと思います。いますぐにでも、あなたの送付先住所を送ってください、そうすればこのレンズを出来るだけ早くあなたに返却することができます。言うまでもありませんが、私は大変不満に感じています。

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後ろ側のキャップには明瞭に「キャノン適合トキナ」と印字されており、それゆえ、あなたがどうして「ソニー・ミノルタ」マウントと間違えたのか理解に苦しみます。私としては、少なくとも購入価格（＄252）の全額払戻しに加え、もともとの送料（＄20）の返金及び返送用送料（金額は今後決定）の払い戻し以外は受け入れるつもりはありません。では、あなたの送付先住所を送ってください、そうすればこのレンズを出来るだけ早くあなたに返品することができます。言うまでもありませんが、私は大変不満に感じています。

元の翻訳
Dear John,
How are you doing?

I am sorry that the contents of my previous email was not easy to understand for you.
I was trying to ask you to upload YouTube the promotion video about HLCRIO151. When such a video is on YouTube, our company can utilise this for the promotion purposes.
We could confirm the image video, but it will be even better if there is a video that explains about the product actually used.

Please inform to me when HLBKIO102 is ready for shipping.
And please ship to us the other products as soon as possible.
　

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Dear John,
How are you doing?

I am sorry that the contents of my previous email was not easy to understand for you.
I was trying to ask you to upload the promotion video about HLCRIO151 on YouTube. When such a video is on YouTube, our company can utilize this for the promotion purposes.
We could confirm the image video, but it will be even better if there is a video that explains about the product actually used.

Please inform to me when HLBKIO102 is ready for shipping.
And please ship to us the other products as soon as possible.
　

元の翻訳
Would you send me a invoice of the merchandise that we ordered a few days ago? Since a quantity and the total amount of the merchandise that were delivered to our international shipper are not matched with the ones we ordered, the merchandise are still in USA.

We would like to ship them to Japan ASAP, so please email me the revised invoice for our international shipper to confirm a quantity and revise the total amount.

Thank you very much for your cooperation.

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Could you please email me the invoice of the merchandise we ordered a few days ago? Since the quantity and the total amount of the merchandise delivered to our international forwarder do not match the ones we ordered, the merchandise is still in the U.S.

We would like to ship them to Japan ASAP, so please email me the revised invoice for our international shipper to confirm the quantity and revise the total amount.

Thank you very much for your cooperation.

元の翻訳
Please respond to my email last time.
I attached the image of spec 00, so please confirm.

The defective merchandise (product) are as follows.
Thank you very much for your correspondence.
We really hope that 00 is recognised as the high quality brand in Japanese market and we believe 00 is the brand which meets such expectation.

I have no intention to say anything insolent to you,↵
but I felt relieved that your email this time includes the contents showing your intention of the improvements.
We are seriously thinking about this brand and we really hope we can improve to the better direction based on the trust between you and us.

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Please respond to my previous email.
I have attached the image of spec 00, so please confirm.

The defective merchandise (product) are [s-v agreement] as follows.
Thank you very much for your correspondence [word choice].
We really hope that the 00 is recognized as a high quality brand in the Japanese market and we believe 00 is a brand that meets such expectation.

I have no intention to say anything insolent to you, but I felt relieved that your email this time includes the contents showing your intention of the improvements.
We are seriously thinking about this brand and we really hope we can head toward a better direction based on the trust between you and us.